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Elderly teacher and young teacher
With the development of society, teachers play an important role in society.
Some students may like elderly teachers` reaching because they think elderly teachers have more teching experience and that they tend to be patient and careful with explanations.
However, I prefer to be tanght by young teachers. Firstly,we students have much in common with them, so they are our friends as well as our teachers. Secondly, they are more energetic and enthusastic. Usually they can make their classes lively and interesting. Besides, they are more ready to accept or create new ideas, including teaching. Thirdly, most young teachers devote themselves to their work, making them teach creatively and effectivelly.
In a word, I prefer young teachers to elderly teachers.

Elderly teacher(s) and young teacher(s)
With the [development of society](social development), teachers play an important role in society.
Some students may like elderly teachers(') [reaching] because they think elderly teachers have more [teching](teaching) experience(s) and [that they] tend to be patient and careful with explanations (given to the students).
However, I prefer to be tanght by young teachers. Firstly,we students have much in common with them, so they are our friends as well as our teachers. Secondly, they are more energetic and enthusastic. Usually they can make their classes lively and interesting. Besides, they are more ready to accept or create new ideas (than elderly teachers), including teaching (techniques). Thirdly, most young teachers devote themselves to their work, making them teach creatively and [effectivelly](effectively).
In a word, I prefer young teachers to elderly teachers.

[] 有问题的部分,可能是需要改写,或拼写问题。
() 实际改动的地方。

第一个society前加the
reaching该成teaching
careful后面的with改成to
explannations改成explannation
prefer to be改成being
make them改成themselves

第二行,最好改成teachers are playing ...
第三行错字,reaching改成teaching
第三行think有面最好加that
第四行teaching 后面的that去了最好
第二段第一行应该是prefer being taught
have much缺宾语(其实也能勉强通顺,最好加个similarities
第二行把 as well as改成and吧,有种生搬硬套的感觉

倒数第四行 accept和create之间改and
倒数第三行,teaching idea
倒数第二行 teaching