电视短消息例子:小弟愚笨,有篇英语作文求教人改正....

College life
You may feel that college life is boring. We do not know how to deal with the plenty of spare time. But I think the college life will become wonderful as long as you make it meaningful.
In your spare time, you could play basketball, football and so on. Doing sports is very interesting and good for your health.
In fact, you can do anything which you are interested in.Do not be nervous.We are friends.
Studying in college is a brand new start of our life.You can continue to study hard for the better scords. Libary is a good place for students to study in. If you want to show your talents and skills you can join in all kinds of activities.
In a word,college life is wonderful!
我解释一下我的意思．
1．tiring是"使人疲劳的". 既然有很多时间，可以休息啊，为什么会疲劳呢？我认为boring（无聊的）比较好．
2．单纯说"有很多时间"，不太具体，所以改成"空闲时间"
3．第一段结尾句，盖的面太大，我把它缩小一些．
4．第三段，说实话，我不太明白你为什么要说"we are friends"，和"nervous"有什么关系．
5.第四段是要讲学习嘛，所以添了个studying
6.brand new start是”崭新的起点”
7．better result是要表达什么
8.show your intelligence是说"展示智商"吗?我觉得"才艺"比较好

以上只是我个人的小小意见,我也不知道说得对不对,见笑

there are a lot of time.
there is a lot of time.

In other words
in the other words

College a new beginning
College is a new beginning

You can continue to study hard for the better result
You can continue to study hard for a better result

Libary is a good places that student study in it
Libary is a good place that student study in

If you want to show your intellegent.You can join all kinds of activities.
If you want to show your intellegent, you can join all kinds of activities.

College life
You may feel that college life is tiring. t、There is a lot of time that we do not know what should we do .But I think college life is wonderful.
If you have much time, you can play basketball,football and so on.Sports are very interesting.
In other words,you can do something which you are interested in.Do not be nervous.We are friends.
College is a new beginning.You can continue to study hard and learn more knowleage .Libary is a good place which we study in .If you want to show your intellegent.You can join all kinds of activities.
In a word.College life is wonderful!

Do not nervous=don't be nervous
College a new beginning=?
Libary=library
places=place
student =students
in it=去掉it
intellegewt=intelligence

College Life
You may feel that college life is tiring(boring更好). As there is a lot of time,we do not know what to do .But I think college life is wonderful.
If you have much time, you can play basketball,football and so on.Sports are very interesting.
In other words,you can do anything that you are interested in.Do not be nervous.We are friends.
College is a new beginning.You can continue to study hard for better result.Library is a good place that students study in.If you want to show your intellegence,you can join in all kinds of activities.
In one word,college life is wonderful!

为保持你的基本意思，我给小改一下（否则就是我的作文了，是吧？）
College life
Maybe you want to say that college life is boring,because there is so much spare time that we don't know what to do .But I think college life is wonderful.
If you have too much time, you can play basketball,football and so on.Sports are so interesting.
Furthermore,you can do something else which you are interested in.Do not be nervous,We are friends.
College life is a new beginning.You can continue to study hard for a better result.Libary is a good place that students study in .If you want to show your intellegence.You can take part in all kinds of activities.
In a word.College life is wonderful!