漂流是自觉的勇猛:开放作文

How to Improve English Writing Ability
To write a diary in English every day, I think, is one of the most effective ways to improve one's English writing ability. Compared with other forms of writing, it's short and takes less time. It can help us form the habit of thinking in English. Step by step, we'll know how to express ourselves in English.
I began to write a diary in English when I was in Junior Grade One. In the beginning, I used short and simple sentences to express myself. My English teacher praised me for this, which gave me much encouragement. My teacher always corrected mistakes in my diary. So I showed greater interest in it. Before long, with the help of my teacher, I could write a short passage. Before I knew it, my writing ability had greatly improved. I have really benefited a lot from writing diaries in English!
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