中科新闻网二手宝俊730:高一学生的英语作文，请教师朋友点评、打分
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The way of reading books
A person who has a lot of knowledge must read many kinds of books, but how could we read books in a right way? Here are some pieces of advice:
First, we all like to read the books that we're interested in, but the most important is we ought to read the books, which are good for us. Reading a bad book means wasting the time of reading a good book.
Second, you'd better not to choose the books that are too easy or too difficult. They can't help you at all.
Third, we always have many books to read, but the problem is we don't have enough time to read them completely. So you must choose someone to read carefully, and note something important. The other can be read carelessly.
Finally, don’t be shy to ask questions, your teachers can be all the people who have knowledge. By the way, a dictionary is the best teacher for you.
If you follow them, I think you will be successful in reading books in the future.
请仔细点评，有追加分数哦！
A person who has a lot of knowledge must read many kinds of books开头可以用更有文采的词句，且应该用非限制性定语从句：A person， who equips with plenty of knowledge,never fail to read different kinds of books.有一个好的开头，且有明晰的结构，没有语法错误，拿24分以上就不困难了．本文思路还是清晰的，尤其很好的一点是用了：FIRST，SECOND等的联系词，这让文章一目了然，也是外国人，乃至托福雅思作文中都常用的．不过本文的语法错误似乎多了些：
1. but the most important is we ought to read the books, 应改为the most important thing is that...（that在表语从句中不能省略）
2. which are good for us改为which is good for us.
3. you'd better not to改为you 'd better not
4.but the problem is 后要加THAT，理由同1．
5．someone特指人，不能代物
6．Finally, don’t be shy to ask questions, 中，逗号应改为句号．这当中有一个很重要的原则：谓语单一原则，即一个句子中只有一套主谓．而逗号间隔仍是一个句子．
在高考中语法错误扣分严重，所以记得仔细检查，不确定的用法不要用.
另一点就是文采了，本文的语言过于平实，缺少让人眼前一亮的好词好句。即使词汇量不大，用一些小词，或否定句，也能让文章更漂亮。如我修改后的开头句，这些词都学过，加起来让文章在印象上已经拿到24分以上了。再举一些例子：
we don't have enough time to read them completely.
__we can't devote all our time to them completely.
your teachers can be all the people who have knowledge. By the way, a dictionary is the best teacher for you.
___your teachers are right there waiting for your questions as well as your dictionary.
建议你可以作一个常用词漂亮用法的归纳：如花时间作某事（这整天用到，可绝大多数只会用spend (time)doing sth,其实还有很多
devote your time to sth
consentrate on
set aside (time ) to do
it take you (time) to do
sacrifice (time ) for 等等
最后打一个分，21分，加油吧，还有很大进步空间呢！
首先指一下你的错误吧:
1-"Here are some pieces of advice"中"here"应该为"there";
2-题目中"books"用"book"即可;
3-"first"...应该用"firstly,secondly,tirdly...finally",应该和"finally"一样,都为副词形式;
4-"we all like to read "应该为"like reading..."
5-"the books"应该为"book"就可以了;
6-这一句最好改为:"firstly,we all like reading book (that) we interest ";
7- 你下一句我不知道你想要表达什么意思,是不是想表达我们应该读所有的书啊? 那就应该有"all" 这句应该为:but the most important thing is that we should read all the book which are good for us";
8-"Reading a bad book means wasting the time of reading a good book"中的"of reading a good book"可以省略;
9-你的错误实在是有点多啊,小错误我就省省了啊....呵呵...
10-"but the problem is we don't have ....."中"that"不可省...
11-"The other can be read carelessly"中的the other"应该改为"the rest of the book" 因为"the other "指"两者中的另外一个";
总之呢,你的作文水平还是有问题的,要加油啊,要是我是你老师的话,那就看心情给分了,心情好的话可能还给个10分鼓励一下,要是不好的话很难说了.这是很正常的情况,就算是高考的时候老师也是一样的,况且改卷的时候很热,不一定能给好多分的.你平时注意一下 ,多看点东西,多记点东西,多几点单词,还有你的思路很乱,举的例子也不是很多,而且例子还要很典型的,怎么找这些例子呢?那你就要多记东西了....呵呵....总之你要努力了...祝你进步.....高考成功....加油啊....
qi其他的我都懂，就是第5条，someone难道不能指某人的书吗 ？
20慢慢来以后会有进步的