faded用中文谐音:高分悬赏帮我看看这篇英文稿子~很急，后天演讲比赛要用

小妹妹，不要听楼上人胡说，题目都没看懂，还要乱讲。Green Olympics 是指“绿色奥运“。
你写得不错，我在首位作了点小补充，让你的文章更切题。还需要你自己补充点。比赛不重要，只祝你演讲成功！

Good morning,
Ladies and gentlemen!Today I want to share with you a little observatoin I have. There are four animal symbols out of the five Friendlies：Beibei is the Fish, Jingjing is the Panda, Yingying is the Tibetan Antelope,andNini is the Swallow.Each of them stands for a crucial part of the environment: Beibei the fish for the water, Jingjing the panda for the forest Yingying the Tibetan Antelope for the mountain, and Nini the swallow for the sky. From this observation I find out how important the environment is for the Beijing Olympics, and I understand more about the government’s manifest of “The Green Olympics”.
As is well known, Beijing City has been short of water for a long time, and the situation is becoming worse and worse. It will become a big problem for the Beijing Olympic Games. So I decide to do what I, a young student can to protect the environment: I start to save water for Beijing, for 2008, for the Olympic Games.
In the first month, I found a lot of ways of saving water. When washing dishes, I fill one sink with soup water and the other with rinse water. In this way, I can clean the dish without the water run while rinsing. In the same way, I wash the fruits and vegetables in a pan of water instead of running water from the tap. And then I keep the rinsing water so that I can reuse it to water houseplants. (最好再来几个好点子)
At last, I made a water saving plan for myself and my family. I ask them to follow the saving steps and tell everybody they know about this plan. In this way, more and more people will start to save water for the Olympic Games. And Beibei the fish will be grateful for what we do for the environment.

Start with you, start with myself, make the little contribution we can in our daily life, the 2008 Green Olympics will become reality. I'm sure I will be proud of the little things I do for Beijing, so will you! Let’s say together: Welcome to Beijing!

那里有个梦想， 所有地球人的梦想。
让这个星球充满了和平与欢笑。
让她到处是欢快的歌声。（这里她代表地球）
让她到处是清绿的水。
让她荡漾在碧空万里的天空下。
你在这个梦想中
他们在这个梦想中
我同样也在这个梦想中
不同的语言表达着两个字
绿色的奥领匹克
对的， 我清楚的记得， 2001年7月13日， 那个美丽的夜晚，没有一个中国人能忘记。
当时我牵着我妈妈的手，空气几乎凝固， 没人能够呼吸， 我和我的家人眼睛都盯着电视。 当撒马兰起先生念到“北京”的时候， 整个中国沸腾了。

有一个梦为地球 , 一个所有的人梦。
制造她的充满和平和笑,
让她各处有甜的歌。
让她的绿色水的把握池塘,
在天空之下以云让她的帆无处发现。
你在这梦,
他们在这梦,
而且我也在这梦。
不同的语言说这二个字,
绿色的奥林匹克。
是的, 我能清楚地记得,2001 七月 13 日，美丽的夜晚, 没有华语能忘记

错误在原句上批注，修改在（）内：

（Do you know）there is one dream for the earth , a dream of all the people?(用问句的形式开头，可以吸引听众的注意)

(It's a dream)to make her full of peace and laughter！

(A dream)to let her has （应为have，因为let sb do sth.do是动词不定式，省略了to，要用原形。）sweet songs everywhere.！

(A dream)to let her holds （hold） ponds of green water, （！）

(A dream)to let her sails （sail） under a （blue）sky with clouds found nowhere.

You （You改为We）are in this dream, ！
They （They改为You）are in this dream,！
And I am （I am改为The whole world is）also in this dream.！

Different languages saying the two words（saying the two words改为will say two same words）,

Green Olympics.(好像是Great吧，口号好像是“Great Beijing ,Great Olympics”,意思是新北京，新奥运，我应该没记错)

Yeah, I can remember clearly, （on）July 13th of （改为in）2001, the beautiful night, which no Chinese can （把no去掉，在can后面加never）forget.

When I holding （改为held 过去式）my mother’s hand, the air was almost froze（应为frozen，adj.冻结的, 冷冰的, 冷酷的，vbl.freeze的过去分词）, with no one could breathe(could breathe改为breathing，with后面用ing座伴随状语).

My familiars and I fixed our eyes on the television.

As（when） Mr.Samaranc said (改为called out比较有号召力)the word ‘BEIJING’, the whole China got ebullition（for so long a time!突出兴奋时间很长）.

错误在原句上批注，修改在（）内：

（Do you know）there is one dream for the earth , a dream of all the people?(用问句的形式开头，可以吸引听众的注意)

(It's a dream)to make her full of peace and laughter！

(A dream)to let her has （应为have，因为let sb do sth.do是动词不定式，省略了to，要用原形。）sweet songs everywhere.！

(A dream)to let her holds （hold） ponds of green water, （！）

(A dream)to let her sails （sail） under a （blue）sky with clouds found nowhere.

You （You改为We）are in this dream, ！
They （They改为You）are in this dream,！
And I am （I am改为The whole world is）also in this dream.！

Different languages saying the two words（saying the two words改为will say two same words）,

Green Olympics.(好像是Great吧，口号好像是“Great Beijing ,Great Olympics”,意思是新北京，新奥运，我应该没记错)

Yeah, I can remember clearly, （on）July 13th of （改为in）2001, the beautiful night, which no Chinese can （把no去掉，在can后面加never）forget.

When I holding （改为held 过去式）my mother’s hand, the air was almost froze（应为frozen，adj.冻结的, 冷冰的, 冷酷的，vbl.freeze的过去分词）, with no one could breathe(could breathe改为breathing，with后面用ing座伴随状语).

My familiars and I fixed our eyes on the television.

As（when） Mr.Samaranc said (改为called out比较有号召力)the word ‘BEIJING’, the whole China got ebullition（for so long a time!突出兴奋时间很长）.

参考资料：个人意见，仅供参考

以下是我参加英语演讲而且获得第二名的切身体验。演讲者除了具备发音清晰，准备充分及足够信心的素质之外，演讲稿还要注意以下6点：
1. 语言简单，通俗易懂。避免使用复杂的单词和从句。
2. 声音洪亮，演讲速度要适当。
3. 必须伴有动作和表情，来吸引听众。
4. 根据听众的鼓掌和表情，做适当停顿。
5. 演讲内容，不要太长，根据时限而定。
6. 切记：不要老是重复一句话，如果忘记台词，可以巧妙地反问一下听众。

建议补充修改如下：

Good morning, teachers and schoolmates,( 根据情况，可以更改称谓)
I am very happy to have this chance and it's my honor to be together with you today.

Now I would like to share my topic with you named "Fuwa and I greet Olympic Game".

Fuwa will serve as the Official Mascots of Beijing 2008 Olympic Games, carrying a message of friendship and peace and blessings(去掉了几个词) all over the world. There are four animals among five symbols： Beibei is the Fish, Jingjing is the Panda, Huanhuan is the Olympic Flame, Yingying is the Tibetan Antelope and Nini is the Swallow. When you put their names together, you will get --Bei Jing Huan Ying Ni—that is to say "Welcome to Beijing," This offers a warm invitation that reflects the mission of Fuwa as young ambassadors for the Olympic Games.

There is one dream for the earth , a dream for all the people. (前后一致)
To make her full of peace and laughter,
To let her have sweet songs everywhere.
To let her hold ponds of green water,
To let her sail under a sky with clouds found nowhere.
(let somebody do something, 让某人干某事，do后用动词原形)
we are all in the dream. (合并为一句话)
The same two words are spoken in different languages,
”Green Olympics”.
Yeah, I can clearly remember the beautiful night on July 13th, 2001 . (月日之间没有of ) Chinese can’t forget the day. When I hold my mother’s hand, the air was almost frozen and nobody could breathe it. My familiars and I fixed our eyes on the television. As Mr.Samaranc called out the word ‘BEIJING’, the whole China was involved in ebullition.

2008 Olympic Games will be coming, athletics coming from countries (去掉all ) around the world are gathered in China. We’re going to make the dream come true.(去掉了一句话) We try our best to do whatever we can to be the volunteers in the future.

（举几个简单实例，如：绿化，节约用水等等）

The 2008 Green Olympics will be at hand soon. Let’s hold hands together, strive for the contributions we do for Beijing, make our Green Olympics colorful and beautiful.

That’s all for my speech today.
Thank for your attending

注：上述内容，红色是建议更改后的内容，蓝色是提示语，黑色是原文，保持不变。
一开始的黑色是在演讲过程中的注意事项。